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All Deviations


Broken hinge
Cannot swing
Simply
Left to rot
Rusting slowly
Into a frenzy
Pretending
It has a purpose
To be
Linking
The door to the frame
Refrain
From explaining to me
The point in it's existence
It's hidden from view
Fundamental you see
Only the status of it's being
Keeps itself alive
Sympathy for the broken?

Give me a break!

Then maybe you'll comprehend
Where you're coming from.
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Don't break it if it's not fixable.
Some thing's just can't be replaced...
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~5chmee:icon5chmee: Mar 26, 2008, 5:55:19 AM
Good stuff...
the only part i didn't like was the "gimme a break"... just seems outta place.

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~RosinAngeLiterature:iconRosinAngeLiterature: Mar 26, 2008, 7:53:29 AM
Thanks again :)

It's meant to be a bit of a kick up the arse..
Feeling all sympathetic and bad for yourself..sometimes you just need to get over it and get on with it.

Plus connotation of "gimmie a break" = kind of ironic in it's own sense. Either shut up and get over it.. or just break it off..leave it..end it.

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~5chmee:icon5chmee: Mar 31, 2008, 11:58:33 AM
mhms.
it didnt really take anything away from the poem for me... it was just like a paper cut with its harshness... which, from yer explanation, is exactly what you were going for.

you owe me a band-aid.

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